September 26, 2014 at 11:45 PM #7302
I thought I wouldn’t really like this script when I first read it, but I ended up having a ton of fun with it once I started working on it. I wrote a little bit about it on my blog post, nothing profound really, but I’ll just keep it short and sweet for here.
Here’s the blog post for further reading, and for slightly bigger pictures: http://kaceeart.blogspot.com/2014/09/storyboardartorg-class-week-3.html
Here’s the contact sheets (Sorry for not making them earlier Sergio, I didn’t realize that’s how you wanted them!):
(I just realized they show up kind of small in this forum post, you might want to use my blog link to check them out.)
September 27, 2014 at 4:13 AM #7312
Great work here! cool drawings and some awesome interesting shot choices.
I called out a few issues but your biggest problem is screen direction. When you establish characters in a scene you need to keep them on that side of the frame throughout the whole scene unless there is a reason to flop them.
you do this multiple times and the effect is a confusing geography for the audience.
Another note is that you are still conservative with your compositions. dont be afraid to tilt the camera and look for dynamic angles even in simple shots. FG, MG , BG always. look for shots shooting through steering wheels, on top of ties, POV of catus etc. be super creative with it
-next time move the camera as well. everything feels static, too shot to shot. move the camera with the characters and create opportunities for cool compositions.
Nice job overall!!September 27, 2014 at 11:24 AM #7344
Thanks Sergio, I had no idea I messed up so much, haha.
I guess I totally spaced out about screen direction, I should’ve paid much more attention to it. Normally I try to, but I think this time I was worrying a lot more about other things, like varying the size of characters and having more depth/perspective in my shots. Having him being in the car made it kind of tough too, but I’m sure there was a proper way to do it that I just don’t know about.
As for having conservative compositions, I guess I’m just having a really hard time with that. Maybe I should do some studies from some action movies?
Camera movement… I hate to admit it but I pretty much avoid it because it’s difficult to do… definitely something I need to practice.
Thanks for the critique! I have a lot to work on!!
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