Tagged: First boards
April 6, 2013 at 2:53 AM #6101
I’m new here and pretty new to storyboarding. It’s something I’ve been experimenting with a bit and I’ve been really liking it. I’ve been trying to find a way to apply my art in some way that I really enjoy and storyboarding seems to be it. Unfortunately, I don’t currently have any resources for critiques! How else am I going to improve if I don’t know what my strengths are and what my weaknesses are.
So, here are the boards I’ve been doing so far in the order I’ve done them. These are still experiments but I hope I’m at least on the right path.
This first set is based on a simple idea I had:
This set is based on the abandoned Godzilla script from the 90’s
This final set is based on an implied scene from Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban (book)
I hope I got this all up right. Thank you in advance for the feedback.April 8, 2013 at 7:11 PM #6108
Hi I went ahead and asked some of our other members on other sites to drop some feedback on your boards. Here is one so far:
Drawings are pretty good. In the first sequence, while I try to not overuse medium shots, in this case it works with your man to set up a rhythm. I’d consider a wide establishing shot to let us know where our character is. What “kind” of bar it is. Does our character fit in? Does he stick out? This will further develop his personality.
Also, once we cut to the girl, give us a wider shot that shows where she is at in the bar in relation to our man. Maybe even obscure her as she emerges from behind other patrons or even some smoke. Are there reaction shots from other patrons? Draw us in a bit more. Just like our man, we need to be reeled in slowly and more completely. Try and utilize more full shots of the girl and dutch the camera angles a bit. These will stand in sharp contrast to our medium centered shots of the man giving us more of a sense of awe and wonder of the girl. Then when we see the broccoli in the teeth the punchline will hit home harder.
Overall, you’ve got an over abundance of medium and cowboy shots. Every type of shot, wide, long, full, medium, cowboy, close up, extreme close up, tells a specific part of the story and gives the audience specific information about that emotional beat. Make sure you know what information and feeling you are trying to convey in the frame and then decide on what camera angle and camera depth you want to use that will best convey the point. (Sergio Paez’s book handles this information in greater detail…)
You’ve got good potential, keep up the good work! By Lincoln AdamsApril 14, 2013 at 2:34 AM #6116
Fantastic feed back! Thank you so much!
I’ll be checking out that book (Professional Storyboarding: Rules of Thumb, correct?)
Also, side note, I thought I had set it up to get an email notification when the thread was updated, so I hadn’t thought anyone had responded!April 17, 2013 at 6:02 PM #6138
Great first boards! I agree with the above comments. Everyone seems to be a bit conservative on shots when we start out. Push it to the extreme, then you can always pull the excitement back if you need to.April 24, 2013 at 3:28 AM #6148
Thank you! And also, I just picked up and read (I assume) your book. A lot of great information that just isn’t really touched on in the other books I’ve picked up in the past.
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