I am redoing the repairman cometh boards after my first version was screwed up when I upgraded from toonboom storyboard to toonboom storyboard pro2. The images got all blurred and flattened so instead of fiddling with i decided to redo them in storyboard pro2. The first version is here https://storyboardart.org/forums/topic/storyboards-for-a-noir-short/
Anyways, critiques, thoughts, tips, or suggestions welcomed and appreciated.
I just could not help myself, when u have toonboom storyboard and you are drwing your boards you are actually creating an animatic as well.
Here is the first animatic i did
Awesome boards! What version of TB are you using? The camera safe guides are a little distracting in the animatic though.
I love the noir/ art house film approach. I would bring up though that in terms of moving beats forward a significant change helps to keep the story alive and the audience engaged. There seem to be a lot of filler moments that a sharp editor wouldn’t resist in chopping up. The mood is great, but the timing and pace could be sped up. I’m still waiting for the woman’s scream and the repair man running out to save the damsel 🙂
Wow thanks Sergio, I try following all of your teachings when I am doing my thumbs so thank you!. I am using Storyboard Pro 2, and saving my pennies for the new version just released, I’m hoping toonboom improved the drawing tools so they feel more like sketchbook Pro.
Thanks for the advise, I will speed it up a bit when I do the final animatic. I thought I was going to get torched because of the obvious duplication of panels, but I guess I got away with it 🙂
Ha Serge said my boards are Awesome, I have to tweet this!
Thanks again Sergio!
very cool work man!
love the mood
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