Hi Andrew, thanks for stopping by! I don’t see any of the images you posted above. Did you follow the Post on how to add images? https://storyboardart.org/forums/topic/how-to-add-images-to-a-post/
oh sorry I will try again.
Hi Andrew, Out of all the Storyboards you have featured on your blog, which series of boards would you like to showcase?
I took a look at the action sequence where the guy is dodging the gun shot. My quick thoughts are that this is a good sequence for you to grow with and it looks like you’re having fun with it! Some adjustments to make would be:
1. Give us an establishing shot of the alley that sets up the environment and where your characters are in relationship to each other.
2. Give us more action as the character is dodging bullets. Could he be jumping off of walls and flipping over shots?
3. Maybe a cutaway to the gunmen showing fear as the guy dodges his shots
4. Like the choreography of the fight so far, but you’d do well to add a well-timed CU that hooks up well. Start a punch wide then cut to a CU of it’s impact. This would be good if it’s a decisive blow. Check out some Jackie Chan sequences!Fight choreography is planned and paced. Think of the story within the story…
5. Make sure to maintain your screen direction. Your Gunman is Screen Right and your assailant is Screen Left before the dodging of the bullets. Then for the fight they flip. Make sure to maintain their directions so the audience doesn’t get confused.
Staging, composition and depth of shots will help turn these into portfolio pieces. Think about how well you can compose each shot, think of the rule of thirds and stage your characters well. This will allow for freedom of movement of the characters, but yield a pleasing composition from most every camera angle. I generally draw a topographic map of the location and the placement and subsequent movement of the characters so that I can really nail the staging in the boards…
If you can start implementing this cinematic language into your boards you’ll be headed in the right direction. As long as you practice, your drawing will get there too! Keep it up and board on!
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