I had a lot of trouble this week as well. I was only able to make it through the first scene.
Same comment I gave for other, you are drawing TOO much. Simplify the thumbs so you only draw the essentials with no tones, detail, or shadows.
The opening shot has all sorts of promise: cool angles, nice camera, objects entering frame,
Then it goes back to the stone age with bland vertical shots with no more interesting composition or camera moves. You seemed to have rushed this. draw less in the thumbs and THINK more. You can do it you totally wow’d me with an awesome opening shot.
You have some screen direction issues as Kume is watching the fight. he is facing screen left then we see him in a reverse shot on screen right.
Why do you have the master walk so far to deliver the sword? stage things closer so that the events happen one after the other to keep the action moving forward.
Don’t give up yet, challenge yourself to make this scene great!
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